First poem I write for something that's not school, hehe... Not very good, in my opinion... so I know it need lots of critiques!! Please tell me what you think.
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A delicate kiss made with caressing lips,
The first, and then the only one.
A special, everlasting moment,
And then, why did it die?
A cut too deep, a wound not healing;
An unrepairable illness for a heart
that can no longer embose suffering.
The same heart that you chose, loved, and then departed,
leaving it alone in the vastness of its solitude.
You passed away, taking my heart along,
But love, you forgot the rest of myself!
You left me trapped in this life that's no longer desirable.
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